My peers suggestion

My first peer: he said that it was well written but he would like to know a litle more about ESOP. Also he said that why did Peter destroy homeworks. Second peer:Why is jimmy Delano his best friend and why is Peter bad ate school does he have a problem or is he just dum also. What did he do to bob so that he suffered 3years of pain in 1 minute. Father: he said that it was good but it could improve first there are some grammar mistakes but that could be easily changed he also said that why didn't his uncle help more or why didn't all of his family take care of his parents if they were cucu He said that maybe the ending is too short and that it should be extended, like the god (Thor)comes to fight him but loses so he gets his hammer. Something like that