Thursday, September 29, 2011
2 rough draft
Samuel Fajardo
Once upon a time there was a boy named Peter Smith. He was a nice boy; good at sports and he was popular. However, when he got to school everything went bad; he sucked at school and Bob Murphy didn’t help. Bob Murphy was a nerd who loved to bother Peter because he thought he was dumb. Peter had tried really hard to be good at school but he just couldn’t. He had a tutor and that's why he hadn’t been failing any class but the tutor recently died of a heart attack.
Poor Peter, what was he going to do? To make things worse, his parents are kind of cuckoo and he had to take care of them because they were very old and couldn’t afford a nurse. His uncle paid Peter’s tuition in the best school possible, the CNG. The uncle only paid because he never helped in the past and now feels guilty and wants to make up for it by paying for his brother’s sons’ education. However, he is not nice to Peter.
At school, most people were normal. They had all a 3 as an average, but there was always the kid who almost failed each year but managed to pass, that was Peter. Most people lived in big houses but Peter lived in a small home with his old and sick parents.
Peter only got cheered up when he saw his best friend Jimmy Delano (They became friends because Peter got in a fight when he was very young, and Jimmy backed him up). Jimmy never bothered Peter because he knew his situation and his DEEP DARK SECRET (He knew it because he bothered Peter once, and saw how Peter turned into a monster/human but he managed to turn back to human). Since that incident, Jimmy is very careful about the way he treats Peter.
One day after lunch, Bob Murphy was being more of a jerk than usual and he was bothering Peter and as they were reaching their math class, it finally got to him. He became a monster!!! (He king of looked like the cookie monster from sesame street just that very scary). Zoom he ran fast, he started to destroy all the homework in CNG, everyone asked themselves why homework? And then Jimmy said that Bob bothered Peter all the time about his bad homework. Peter didn’t stop after CNG, he went after all the homework in all the schools of South America. Homework was disappearing, and after only five minutes there was no more homework left in the whole world.
After Peter the monster destroyed all the homework, he went back to CNG and made his den/home in the math room. Everybody was afraid of him, he was so angry his skin turned blue. Each day he attacked a teacher but Bob Murphy was the one who suffered the m0ost. Peter made sure that he paid back for the 3 years he had been his victim. After 2 days after Peter had taken over the school, the CIA and the FBI arrived at the school. After planning what to do for hours, someone finally shot the monster but it the bullets melted as they touched Peter’s skin. What were they going to do? He couldn’t be touched by metal because he was so hot that the metal melted. The president of the FBI said that maybe he couldn’t melt plastic. Everyone laughed and someone yelled out: "what are we going to do, make bullets of plastic? Hahahahahahah, he replied, "No we are going to hit him with the strongest tranquilizer in the world". At dawn, the snipers were ready to shoot, they took different places around the Math room. The monster had woken up and as soon as he was about to eat another teacher, the first plastic tranquilizer hit him. At first, Peter only felt a little dizzy, but after 20 shots he had past out. As soon as the CIA and FBI agents got 15 feet away from the monster, he started to rise and went to the Heaven of Homework, where he was punished by Esob; the leader of the homework gods, for his actions of destroying HOMEWORK, now no one would worship them by doing HOMEWORK.
Samuel Fajardo
Wednesday, September 21, 2011
Rough draft for myth no changes
Once upon a time there was a boy named Peter Smith. He was a nice boy; good at sports and he was popular. When he gets to school everything gets bad; he sucks at school and Bob Murphy isn't any help. Bob Murphy is a nerd who loves to bother Peter because he is dum. Peter has tried really hard to be good at school but he just can't. He has a tutor and that's why he hasn't been failing any class but he just died of a heart attack. Poor Peter, what was he going to do? To make things worse, his parents are kind of cucu and he had to take care of them. His uncle pays his tuition in the best school possible, the CNG. Most people were normal at the school, got 3 as an average but there was always the kid who almost failed each year but managed to pass, that was Peter. Most people lived in big houses but Peter lived in a small home with all of his extended family.
He only gets cheer up when he see's his best friend Jimmy Delano; he never bothers Peter because he knows his situation and his DEEP DARK SECRET, so he is very careful about that by the way Peter deep dark secret is that if he gets bothered to much he wil turn into a monster. That day Bob Murphy is more of a jerk than usual and it finally gets to him; Peter becomes a monster!!! Zoom he ran by fast, he started to destroy all the homework in CNG but that wasn't all, next all of south America's homework was gone and after only 5 min. there was no more homework left in the whole world.
After Peter the monster destroys all of the homework he goes back to his school CNG and makes his den/home there and each day he destroys a little more of the school and eats one teacher a day but his first victim was Bob Murphy and made him suffer a minute as much as he had for 3 years. After 2 days after Peter had taken over the school, the CIA and the FBI arrive at the school. After planning what to do for hours, someone finally shoots at the monster but it melts as it touches Peter. What were they going to do? He can't be touched by metal or the metal melts. The president of the FBI says that maybe he can't melt plastic. Everyone laughed and someone yells out: "what are we going to do, make bullets of plastic? hahahahahahah. He replies "no we are going to hit him with the strongest of tranquilizer in the world". At dawn, the snipers are ready to shoot. The monster has woken up and as soon as he is about to eat another teacher, the first plastic tranquilizer hits him, but he only feels a little dizzy. After 20 shots he is dead or passed out. As soon as the CIA and FBI agents get 15 feet away from the monster he starts to rise and goes to the Heaven of Homework, where he will be punished for his actions of destroying HOMEWORK.
THE END
He only gets cheer up when he see's his best friend Jimmy Delano; he never bothers Peter because he knows his situation and his DEEP DARK SECRET, so he is very careful about that by the way Peter deep dark secret is that if he gets bothered to much he wil turn into a monster. That day Bob Murphy is more of a jerk than usual and it finally gets to him; Peter becomes a monster!!! Zoom he ran by fast, he started to destroy all the homework in CNG but that wasn't all, next all of south America's homework was gone and after only 5 min. there was no more homework left in the whole world.
After Peter the monster destroys all of the homework he goes back to his school CNG and makes his den/home there and each day he destroys a little more of the school and eats one teacher a day but his first victim was Bob Murphy and made him suffer a minute as much as he had for 3 years. After 2 days after Peter had taken over the school, the CIA and the FBI arrive at the school. After planning what to do for hours, someone finally shoots at the monster but it melts as it touches Peter. What were they going to do? He can't be touched by metal or the metal melts. The president of the FBI says that maybe he can't melt plastic. Everyone laughed and someone yells out: "what are we going to do, make bullets of plastic? hahahahahahah. He replies "no we are going to hit him with the strongest of tranquilizer in the world". At dawn, the snipers are ready to shoot. The monster has woken up and as soon as he is about to eat another teacher, the first plastic tranquilizer hits him, but he only feels a little dizzy. After 20 shots he is dead or passed out. As soon as the CIA and FBI agents get 15 feet away from the monster he starts to rise and goes to the Heaven of Homework, where he will be punished for his actions of destroying HOMEWORK.
THE END
Monday, September 19, 2011
grammar quizes
In the first quiz I learned that, the length of a sentence has no effect on the run ons.
In the second quiz I learned that, who refers to people and that and which refer to groups or things
In the third quiz I learned that, a compound sentence means that it has a dependent clause a complex has two independent clause and compound complex is when there is a dependent clause and two independent clauses.
Friday, September 9, 2011
Character development
Character development is when the authors tell you about the characters. For example if you put an ordinary name and an ordinary life you don't think any thing is going to happen because he is just a normal boy that's character devolment.
Conflict with th main character that van tell you if the character has a problem with something like school or work or at home.
Setting if it's at a beach I think it is either going to be a fun with almost no plot or conflict or it has a shark in it but if in the woods at night it more likely to be a scary story.
The authors do that because there's a character who does nothing it almost invisible and BOOM he let's say goes and fights for his friend the author made us think that he wasn't important to give us the small surprise. That's why the author do that,
Conflict with th main character that van tell you if the character has a problem with something like school or work or at home.
Setting if it's at a beach I think it is either going to be a fun with almost no plot or conflict or it has a shark in it but if in the woods at night it more likely to be a scary story.
The authors do that because there's a character who does nothing it almost invisible and BOOM he let's say goes and fights for his friend the author made us think that he wasn't important to give us the small surprise. That's why the author do that,
Thursday, September 8, 2011
brian storm for myth
1st idea. Homework and how hard it is to do and how smart people bothering you.
Characters me and my best 7 friend, and 1 or 2 nerds and a monster.
Setting. A middle school but when it's attacked by the monster it becomes a military training base so that the military can train on how to fight a real monster.
Problem. One problem is that homework is hard and that people call you stupid. Problem number 2 is that a person gets so bothered about homework, that he becomes a monster and destroys all kinds of homework in the world and then starts to destroy CNG middle school and the CIA and FBI come to stop him.
They shoot the monster with a tranquilizing dart and he rises to the gods of homework to be sanctioned but there is no trace of homework so there is no more homework anymore.
1 monster 2 how people lived 3 social structure 4 a invented god
2nd idea. Gossip and how people invent bad stories about you because they think its funny.
Characters, some people who made up the gossip, the one who the gossip was about and the gossip god.
Setting. Room M4
Problem. A boy gets so annoyed about the gossip about him that he calls the Gossip God and the king of the gods, ESOB says that he will talk to the people that are messing with him. The gossipers don’t believe ESOB so he has no choice but to curse them in the worst way, that is to make them mute.
3rd idea. A vegan cafeteria at a middle school in France.
Problem, the kids love all kinds of food, cheese, pastries, escargot but they are in a vegan school.
Characters. French snob students who love food.
Setting. Middle School in Paris.
French kids arrive to vegan school; they don’t like it so they ask the gods for help. The oldest boy tells the god that he will travel to the end of the world to find the best and most delicious meat and cheese in the world to show that being vegan is stupid. Zeus responds that why go through all that work, he says, why don’t you ask them to change the menu?
No weird travels have to take place.
Wednesday, September 7, 2011
Completely imaginary observed or knowing people and touch of you in them
Who is the hero
Make them very in-depth by different characteristics
What is there ambition and or talent
what is there deep dark secret
Give them a best friend
Worst enemy and why
Also what we carry in our pocket
The names are important to what there are
Bring character to life make action
They do that so that the author can choose what they want us to feel about the certain character
Who is the hero
Make them very in-depth by different characteristics
What is there ambition and or talent
what is there deep dark secret
Give them a best friend
Worst enemy and why
Also what we carry in our pocket
The names are important to what there are
Bring character to life make action
They do that so that the author can choose what they want us to feel about the certain character
Tuesday, September 6, 2011
That which and who
That is has a broader span of what it could be like it could be referring to a "type of person" (quotation from Englishplus.com). Which is likely only to be used when refering things. Who us the exact opposite it is only used when referring to people.
WHO. used incorrectly, who is that. used correctly, who could be that person who is looking so much at us
THAT. used incorrectly, that is not cool. used correctly, that was a heck of a ride
Which used correctly, hey give me my game back which I was going to give to my brother but he already left beacause your taking so long to give it to me. USED INCORRECTLY, which of them is your girlfriend
A run on sentence is a one where the ideas could be differnt sentence like.
I like pizza, the girls lost the game, and the coach is mad.
compound complex sentences are good sentences that are not run on doing the ex drom above it would be.
I like pizza. The girls lost the game. The coach was mad.
WHO. used incorrectly, who is that. used correctly, who could be that person who is looking so much at us
THAT. used incorrectly, that is not cool. used correctly, that was a heck of a ride
Which used correctly, hey give me my game back which I was going to give to my brother but he already left beacause your taking so long to give it to me. USED INCORRECTLY, which of them is your girlfriend
A run on sentence is a one where the ideas could be differnt sentence like.
I like pizza, the girls lost the game, and the coach is mad.
compound complex sentences are good sentences that are not run on doing the ex drom above it would be.
I like pizza. The girls lost the game. The coach was mad.
Sunday, September 4, 2011
One of the problems that occurs during middle school is gossip. Because they make lies that hurt mentally and then more people get on the joke not knowing how much it can actually do. An other one is homework because were getting to the grades that if you don't do your home its really bad unlike in elementary that you can just make up for it. Something that goes with homework is grades because now its important because there is A.P college and it gets really stressing.
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